wmz546 发表于 2024-7-8 22:31   全显示 1楼
作者的文笔感觉很舒服。属于那种“能把场景说清楚让人足够幻想，但又没有过度描述，让大脑过于费力的去搭建舞台”。先结尾后原因的的故事情节也比较容易展开，一点小建议:是不是将女主被干爽的淫语，阿黑颜等等适当的增加一些，感觉会更好（类似美漫风格文《黑星女侠》之类），代入感更强？
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